I’m Stuck

Usually when I think of something I want to write about, the idea germinates from the very first sentence. I rarely need to edit that sentence at all, because it’s exactly what I want. The rest of the piece just naturally flows from there, and I do little editing to the thought itself, and just some sentence revision for flow or clarity, that sort of thing.

My biggest issue with the girls is remembering to keep their voices separate. Janie is a young, bright student of literature, with a large vocabulary and a good turn of phrase always at hand. She can say things without saying them with great ease and “waxes damned near poetic”.

Kate is much rougher around the edges, harder, more explicit about everything. She often mentions that she has Janie proofread her stuff and Janie helps a bit with word choice and phrasing, grammar, spelling, that sort of thing. So Kate’s voice in her writing is more blunt and straightforward, without sounding too much like the Marine she so recently was.

So I’ve had this idea about Janie and Kate writing about the same erotic experiences, each from their own point of view, with each girl influencing and pulling at the tone of the other’s writing. Janie would stray a bit more towards the explicit, Kate towards the more tasteful, without completely surrendering their own voices.

I’ve finished the first chapter of the first story and it’s a tough balancing act, much tougher than I had believed it would be. Too many voices in one head, but too late to worry about it.

I’m quite proud of the first chapter by each girl, I think I managed to accomplish what I set out to achieve.  I like the flow and the verbage of each story, and I think I left a really good ending and set up for chapter two.

I know where I’m heading with chapter two, and I have a vague idea of the general plot of this escapade, and many of the little details I want to include at some point.  I don’t have the ending at all yet, but that’s not unusual.

But I’m stuck.

Remember when I mentioned that I usually have the opening sentence first thing, and work from there?  Yeah.  A complete blank for both girls.  If I could even open for one of them, I think I could work out the other.

Nothing.  Well, almost nothing.  I have Kate’s first two words of her first sentence (Jake Lacoste), but that’s it – Jake’s name.  I’m stumped, stuck, at a standstill.  Too many voices, and I can’t hear any of them over the others.  It’s the mental equivelant of white noise.

Maybe I should have a contest or something.

17 Responses to “I’m Stuck”

  1. Robyn Says:

    I know that feeling, like studdering. Have you heard of the fiction contest at gather.com? The erotic element might not fit within the rules, depending on how far you go with it, but you should look into it anyway. Maybe having an actual deadline (March 15) might be the kick in the butt you need to focus.


  2. Lou FCD Says:

    Thanks Robyn! Even if I can’t enter my story, I can still sort of think of that as my deadline anyway.

    Maybe that’ll help.

  3. AnotherSadSong Says:

    About the voices…maybe you should see a doctor… they have special places for people with too many voices in their head.

    just a suggestion.


  4. Lou FCD Says:

    Those people scare me with their white lab coats and those backwards sweaters they try to put on me all the time.


  5. Kevin Scott Says:


    You are 10x the writer I am–you have the ability to see yourself as the “voice” of someone you have created in your own mind. You need to get paid for this. For the last several years I have made an obscene amount of money writing what people want to read. And, as I mentioned, you are many times the writer I am.

    My two cents.

  6. Kevin Scott Says:


    While here I was “browsing” some of your other threads and found a mention your wife’s parents are from eastern KY–just curious where? I lived in eastern Ky for 20 years or so.


  7. Lou FCD Says:

    Thank you, Kevin. I’ve always enjoyed writing, but until you brought it up, never even thought about getting paid to do it.

    Louisa, oddly enough. Well, that’s their mailing address, but they’re about 12 miles south of there. ’bout 50 miles south of Ashland, just on the north side of the Johnson County / Lawrence County line.

  8. Lou FCD Says:

    Tell me again about the obscene money…. I mean obscene amount of money….

  9. Lou FCD Says:

    You know what’s really scary now?

    Walking into the bathroom, which has a large mirror just inside the door, and for just a split second – I was shocked.

    It really, honestly, I swear to God startled me to see a man looking back at me.

    That’s scary, Kevin. (no pun intended, but it’s funny)

  10. Kevin Scott Says:


    You’re just a figment of the girls’ imagination…that is scary.

    I have been ALL OVER Louisa. Heck, I pastored two churches in Lewis Co (east of Maysville, north of Morehead) and eventually ran through every hill and holler from Inez to Ironton.

    You asked about obscene money–or at least you made the joke, maybe you weren’t serious about wanting to know more.

    Well, I started writing a reply then it got impossibly long, so I posted it at my Soylent Green – ItsPeopleDammit(TM) blog. I think it will give you a couple ideas:


  11. JanieBelle Says:

    Hey! If he makes a crapload of cash, he better not forget about us!


    He just dropped you a note over there at your blog.

    Kisses, Kevin.

  12. Lou FCD Says:

    Thanks, Kevin! I need to read through that a few more times, which I’ll have to do first thing in the AM.


    Get back over on your side of the fence, or I’ll turn you over my knee.

    oh wait.

    Get back over there or I won’t turn you over my knee!


  13. JanieBelle Says:

    You are too cute. I’m outta here before you decide not to spank me!


  14. Robyn Says:

    Lou, I am continually fascinated by the collection of readers you pick up–now you’ve got a Bible reader AND a writer, and he puts “damnit” in his blog title, which makes me like him immediately. What an interesting and eclectic man you are. His advice seems solid to me, but I’m relatively ignorant. My husband owns a small publishing company, but I have always tried to keep to my little corner of it.

    Oh, and it’s a Christian company with a limited niche, so I’m afraid the girls, and Maryann, will have to look elsewhere.

  15. Lou FCD Says:

    I do have quite the mix of readers, on each of the three blogs. ‘Course Old Knudsen isn’t exactly the type of fella I’d expect to see at your blog, either! You have a pretty good mix going yourself.

    I’m afraid I haven’t been able to get the time to visit other people’s blogs much, and truth be told I’m several chapters behind on Maryann. I hope to catch up this weekend. Don’t spill any details!

    If you don’t mind my asking, and if you don’t mind sharing, of all my readers I’ve been wondering if you’ve been reading The Itch and/or Quiet The Hum, and if they’re not too spicy for your tastes, what you’ve thought of them. (I was also wondering about Amanda, but since she commented, I know she’s reading them.)

    Please don’t feel pressured to respond, but I really have been wondering.

    Kevin’s a terrific fella, and rather interesting himself. I first bumped into him at AtBC, where he goes by “ScaryFacts” (hence the pun about “scary, Kevin”). Quite the story there. (His other site is “WhoreChurch.com” btw – Now you should REALLY like him!)

    No, I suppose the girls wouldn’t have much luck with your husband’s publishing company, though as far as I am (chapter 13 or so, I think) with Maryann, I don’t see the problem with her. Maybe I just haven’t gotten to the juicy parts yet! 🙂

    If I have any luck at all, I’ll be sure to pass it along to you. Maryann really deserves to be read by a wide audience.

  16. Robyn Says:

    First, the thing with Old Knudson is unusual I suppose. We read other’s stuff every day, and when he writes something particular raunchy, he will sometimes put up a personal advisory note for me. Kind of funny. But of course anything he tells me not to read or click on, of course I’m right there.

    Second, I read the first chapter of The Itch and really like the style. I didn’t have time to read on at the time, but I’ll get back to it when I can. Honestly, though, spicy things really aren’t my taste, so I won’t commit.

    Third, as far as my book not fitting in to my own company’s niche, it’s very conservative, and every good thing needs to be openly attributed to God. And without spoiling anything for you, my main character is hardly looking to commit until death, and she will not be looking for a Focus on the Family marriage counselor to help redeem her wayward husband.

  17. Lou FCD Says:

    We all have that streak, don’t we?

    “Whaddya mean I’m not supposed to know what’s in there? Why? What’s in there?”

    I’m glad you liked the first chapter of The Itch.

    As a general rule, the more conservative of my readers are preferring that half of the story. You probably wouldn’t care for the other half, if spicy isn’t your taste. Kate (as I’m sure the entire world is aware) is a bit more raw, though I wouldn’t go so far as to call it porn or anything.

    (Of course, now that I’ve said that, you’ll probably be right over there! 🙂 )

    I’m really not much for the type of stuff you describe in your company’s niche. Besides the whole infidel thing, it just comes off as so one dimensional and shallow. There’s no meat to the stew, and I’m sure I’ll prefer Maryann to anything of that sort.

    That said, I really do hope Maryann’s husband gets mushed under the rocks. And I hope Maryann finds herself a “friend” or two around town.

    Here’s an idea… she’s up late with her best friend next door, see, and they’ve been drinking, see… and they’re celebrating the mine collapse, see… and they both have a lttle too much to drink, see…

    Oh. um… sorry.


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